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Joseph L. Wiess's avatar

A good story should always have downtime for the characters. Sleeping, eating, reading, dreaming, and cooking all add depth to the story. Springjacks being a rabbit the size of a lynx. Very descriptive. And Marten thinking about Gauir all day.

This shows humanity. Great job, Dave.

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The Man Behind the Screen's avatar

Thank you kindly, Joseph.

Your comment also helped me realize that I goofed up and forgot to change the chapter name from the draft I copied XD

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