Excellent. The pygmies with a gray leader, demon worshipper, the stripped humans, the tied up natives, the action, the daring, and the terror soarer turning into black ooze, only to rise up again.
1 - the ritual chant of the worshippers. You built up to that nicely with the procession of the sacrifices, and the chant of the demon felt like a great climax.
2 - the tranformation. Good gutteral description - I was picturing some sort of H. R. Gieger bat-blowfish-pterodactyl chimera.
That imagery isn't how it appeared in my head, but damn, I'll take that as a win! Giger's always been one of my favorite artists so I take that as a big compliment.
Excellent. The pygmies with a gray leader, demon worshipper, the stripped humans, the tied up natives, the action, the daring, and the terror soarer turning into black ooze, only to rise up again.
Great job.
Great chapter! This may be my favorite of yours yet.
Great writing! I love the sense of mystery you open with.
Two standout moments:
1 - the ritual chant of the worshippers. You built up to that nicely with the procession of the sacrifices, and the chant of the demon felt like a great climax.
2 - the tranformation. Good gutteral description - I was picturing some sort of H. R. Gieger bat-blowfish-pterodactyl chimera.
That imagery isn't how it appeared in my head, but damn, I'll take that as a win! Giger's always been one of my favorite artists so I take that as a big compliment.
This whole story is great and I can't wait to see what happens next!
I must say, my favorite little detail is the play on words you used for the pterosaur/terror soarer.