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Caitriana NicNeacail's avatar

I’m getting a kind of steampunk vibe with the wooden parts of the ship, and the gun, very nice!

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Ethan Sabatella's avatar

This has been really cool to catch up on and read! Thanks for inviting me to the Sword & Saturdays!

I really like seeing someone adding dinosaurs to S&S, really something the genre (or any genre really) has been lacking!

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Joseph L. Wiess's avatar

Now that I've had time to properly read this. I like it. A crashed rocket ship, the flintlock pistol, two bright inquisitive (I'm not going to call them beastmen) native hunters, and the beautiful damsel. Now, let's see what chapter 3 does.

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The Black Knight's avatar

I keep visualizing that vessel as a big zeppelin! Great stuff :D

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The Man Behind the Screen's avatar

Zeppelin isn't quite it, but the airship is close enough to one. The Blue-Jay was basically a flying boat held aloft by rotors and ornithopter-like wings.

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The Black Knight's avatar

I suspected those long things were the zeppelin's rotors and the main construction blown to bits somewhere. Gotta re-read it this weekend.

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Feb 4, 2024
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The Man Behind the Screen's avatar

Not quite a musket, but an old flintlock pistol. I tried to base the description off a historical replica I own without making it overt since neither brother would have any idea what it was.

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Jan 13, 2024
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The Man Behind the Screen's avatar

This has turned into something of an experimental challenge for me. While I've written in the perspectives of primitive men or beastly creatures before, it was always in brief, usually through cutaways to build tension or which acted as a lead-in to transition to a main character with a more traditional understanding that's easier to grasp. It's heartening to see that this challenge seems to be going well and that Blackpaw's view of the world and the things he feels in the moment are translating properly.

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