The prodigal daughter will have to do a lot of excusing when she gets back home... if... if she gets back home. Wonderful chapter, my friend. I really liked the scenic descriptions and, of course, the blossoming relation of Katrine and Paul.
Expert handling of the relationship pace between Paul and Katrine. They've only known each other for a short time: Katrine seems to be trusting more in Paul with each chapter, but it doesn't feel rushed or unreasonable. The bit of dialogue right before Katrine walking away (with her realization that she's being ungracious) is a good example. Just when she's about to tell Paul what ills her, the huntsman comes in and kills the mood. (I felt for Paul at that moment, saying to the huntsman, "Buzz off, dude...").
Another part I appreciate is the storybook atmosphere. I can't describe this as clearly. It feels like a written version of the Disney movie "Beauty and the Beast". The plot's different of course (I haven't spotted any hair/claws on Paul... yet), but for some reason that is the art and music style I think of while reading.
Yes! You got it, that classic Disney feel is one of the exact impressions I was trying to capture with this! Part of why this expanded from what was originally going to be a one-off was the dawning realization that I had an opportunity to try and capture that sort of feeling in a story like this, that fairytale sense of wonder that you'd often see in Disney at its best. I'll also bet that part of what spurred that feeling for Beauty and the Beast specifically was the wolf pack attacking in ch. 3, given that happens to Belle, too. (Though the scene wasn't direct inspiration, the similarity did dawn on me as I was writing it.)
I'm pleased to see that the pace of Paul and Katrine's growing relationship feels right. I'm trying to take great care not to rush things with this story, so it all can unfold at its own pace. It's a bit challenging to do since my usual writing is pulp inspired and thus tends to move at a more brisk pace. As for the huntsman, yes, he's a bit of a prick, far from the knight in shining armor they'd likely have preferred as their savior. He has his reasons for being as he is, but he's definitely picking on them unfairly.
Beautifully written. I especially liked the way you used three different senses to describe Kathrine’s awakenings from her doze; very immersive and an excellent way to convey the journey on horseback.
I’m so happy these chapters don’t feel short or abrupt! I feel like I’m being carried along at the perfect pace.
To the Castle on the Hill!! 🐎
Tally-ho!
The prodigal daughter will have to do a lot of excusing when she gets back home... if... if she gets back home. Wonderful chapter, my friend. I really liked the scenic descriptions and, of course, the blossoming relation of Katrine and Paul.
Expert handling of the relationship pace between Paul and Katrine. They've only known each other for a short time: Katrine seems to be trusting more in Paul with each chapter, but it doesn't feel rushed or unreasonable. The bit of dialogue right before Katrine walking away (with her realization that she's being ungracious) is a good example. Just when she's about to tell Paul what ills her, the huntsman comes in and kills the mood. (I felt for Paul at that moment, saying to the huntsman, "Buzz off, dude...").
Another part I appreciate is the storybook atmosphere. I can't describe this as clearly. It feels like a written version of the Disney movie "Beauty and the Beast". The plot's different of course (I haven't spotted any hair/claws on Paul... yet), but for some reason that is the art and music style I think of while reading.
Yes! You got it, that classic Disney feel is one of the exact impressions I was trying to capture with this! Part of why this expanded from what was originally going to be a one-off was the dawning realization that I had an opportunity to try and capture that sort of feeling in a story like this, that fairytale sense of wonder that you'd often see in Disney at its best. I'll also bet that part of what spurred that feeling for Beauty and the Beast specifically was the wolf pack attacking in ch. 3, given that happens to Belle, too. (Though the scene wasn't direct inspiration, the similarity did dawn on me as I was writing it.)
I'm pleased to see that the pace of Paul and Katrine's growing relationship feels right. I'm trying to take great care not to rush things with this story, so it all can unfold at its own pace. It's a bit challenging to do since my usual writing is pulp inspired and thus tends to move at a more brisk pace. As for the huntsman, yes, he's a bit of a prick, far from the knight in shining armor they'd likely have preferred as their savior. He has his reasons for being as he is, but he's definitely picking on them unfairly.
I will try to wait *patiently* for the next chapter 😅
Beautifully written. I especially liked the way you used three different senses to describe Kathrine’s awakenings from her doze; very immersive and an excellent way to convey the journey on horseback.