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Dec 14, 2023Liked by The Man Behind the Screen

I loved the character flow. When Paul and Kat started talking, it became real for me.

I thought her jumping from row to row was interesting, and could just imagine that horse running down the rows.

If more people wrote as people lived, books would make more sense.

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The funny thing is, I've never ridden a horse before. But I've seen plenty of them, enough to have a good idea how big they are.

And I've been to plenty of vineyards, enough to know about how wide apart they plant their grapes and have an idea of how flimsy the support frames they use for the vines might be if someone tried to stand on top of them, much less jump to one.

Personally, I'm of the opinion that part of that lack of sense is people tend to write books to be more like movies or TV shows when, as you say, if they wrote how people lived it'd make a lot more sense.

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Mar 8Liked by The Man Behind the Screen

I have never seen how grapevines are planted and have seldom been to farms. So, I couldn’t picture the scenes in my head. But it was an engaging read nonetheless.

Chapter 3, here I come!

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Jan 19Liked by The Man Behind the Screen

Great action! And I like Paul already ☺️

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Paul is a character that very much surprised me. I originally intended him to be basically a side character, but just like the initial chapter of this the more I worked, the clearer it became that I had much more to say and do with him than original intent lead me to believe.

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Jan 20Liked by The Man Behind the Screen

It’s fun when a side character pushes their way to the foreground of a story, isn’t it? Also sometimes annoying, as you frantically try to rewire plot, but fun.

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Jan 16Liked by The Man Behind the Screen

Paul's a true gentleman.

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He tries to be :)

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deletedDec 14, 2023Liked by The Man Behind the Screen
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Honestly, I felt like I was channeling a lot of the energy that you and Joseph Weiss put into the character interactions of your stories while I was writing this chapter. I kept getting struck with the sense that the way Katrine and Paul interacted and spoke to each other would fit with either of your stories, which told me I was probably on the right track ;)

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